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Personal Narratives

by 4th graders in Room 5
September 2003

Lining up one fall morning in front of Room 5

 

Editors Note: For most of the authors in this collection of personal narratives, the writing process consisted of making some pre-writing notes, writing a first draft, conferencing with one or more peers for feedback, rewriting, proofreading, and finally handing in a final copy to the editor (their teacher yours truly). In the commercial publishing world it is the editors job to proofread and make corrections in the mechanics and spelling of the authors manuscript after the author has gone through a number of revisions and rewrites which have presumably caught most of those errors in advance. Here, "the editor" (their teacher) has chosen for instructional purposes to place much of the responsibility for proofreading on the writers, providing them with an individual galley proof typed copy of their own handwritten manuscript with all their original errors intact for them to find and correct, prior to then making the changes indicated by the individual authors and finally reformatting the collection as you see here. While many corrections were made, many were also missed as you will see. Regardless, I hope you will agree that the result has its own charm!

 

Stormy Winter in Myers Flat!
by Jeremy Burt

Me, my Dad, and Ryan all went to Myers flat for the weekend. When we finaly got there it was full of puddles of rain, we could tell it was going to be a stormy winter.
When we unpacked the groceries, my Dads dog Johny was very happy to see us again. Me and Ryan rode are bikes, played on the tire swing, rosted marshmellows, and other fun stuff.
The worst thing is we were stuck in my dads leaky trailer, intil my dad built us a two story house, me and ryan helped him alot. Once back in the trailer when Ryan wasnt there, it was a stormy night, so stormy there was a Blackout, and stuff, I was up to like 1:30 in the morning! And when the river got high, it was horrible, the river was full of whirl pools! Big enough to suck me down!!!


family
by Samantha Beacham

I lived in New Jersey. It was fun but I had to go to California to live there. So far it was good. I went to my grandmas and grandpas house. We got to see my cousins. It was fun. There names are Zack and Vins. We went to CCs and that was so good. We had to go so we said, goodbye. We went to Mississippi. I saw my cousins. Her name is Casey. We caught three frogs and took them over her house and let the too big ones go and let the baby one swim in her house. We went to sleep and the frog was gone!!! Then we had to go. Goodbye.
I went to the Grand Canyon. I went to go look. It was so big that my mom didnt look at it all. We went shopping and we saw a lot of stuff. I got a Dream Catcher. And thats my family.


Idaho
Kieran Cook

On my way to Idaho I woke up and I was in a blizzard. I couldnt even see two hundred feet ahead. In the morning we were at a rest stop in Oregon. There were patches of snow scattered so my dad Mike and I had a snow ball fight. At around ten oclock we got back in the truck and drove to MacDonalds for beakfast. When we got there I took a walk in the snow, it was about one foot deep. The next day I was playing with a water balloon in the snow I throw it and lost it in the snow. Later after I looked for my water balloon I built a wall of snow and had a snow ball fight with the other kids there. The next day I found the water balloon. The water inside it was frozen! I thought that was cool, so I froze about twenty more water balloons and instead of having a snow ball fight we had a frozen water balloon fight. After lunch I spent hours trying to build a snow fort, I never got it stable so each time I went in it callapsed and I nearly stuck. A few days later all the snow melted I launched a rocket it landed in a tree. My dad had to climb up and get it even though he is afraid of heights. I was sad we had to leave.


Camping
Rachele Allen

That day we were leaving to camp. When we got on the road we past my Noni and Papa in the yellow truck. When we got to camp me and my brother played in a tree while my mom and papa set up camp. Then we ate dinner and went to bed. The next day we played with water baloons. After we went to the river and playd in the sand. Then we came back and took a shower. It is morning me and my brother are rideing our bikes down the hill. Now it is time to eat breakfast. Then a girl asked if I wanted to play with her and I said yes. Then my ante came across the bridge and i had to say goodbye and I ran to her. We went to the river and then my cousin came down to the river. We took a wake with my aunt, my brother, cousin and I. Then we went back to camp and brought the dog to the river. Then a big black dog took him right from my Aunt. A stranger saved him. Harley now is Happy.


The football game

Cody Briggs

It was 27 to 12, Jacks in The Lead! I throw a long bomb and our wide receiver caught it. Now the score was 33 to 12, 82 seconds on the clock. the other team has the ball. We pushed them back! They throw a log bom and I caught the enersheption and i ran with the ball and got the touch down the score is 39 to 12 and the Jacks win again! We were jumping up and down my football team lifted me up on their shoulders!
The crowd rand down off the stands on the field and the put me down. We huddled up and our coach told us where practice is tomorrow! We went home but before we went home we went to go get something to eat at Jack in the Box. I went to my Grandma Howe and told her all about it. I walk back to my house. And got in bed and the next morning I got up, got my football gear on, and went to practice. We ran hills at Zane and split up in two groups and played against each other. I was the quarterback. We ran different plays we always got a touch down. Our defense is horrible. We beat them at practice and I went home and did my chores. And ate dinnner and after dinner I read a book and faded away. the next morning I went to my freind Dart’s. He plays on my football team and we played play station games and we went outside at 9:00 at night. We were rollerskating until 1:00 in the morning and we went back before his mother woke up. We jumped into his bunk bed. i was on the top and he was on the bottom and she woke up in the room and turned on the light. We went outside and played.


A Good Day
Brittany Phillips

One day after school me and my cousin Lacey came to my house and got to play with the cats and kittens. After that we go to eat and feed all of the cat’s including the kittens. And then we got to play outside. Finally it started to get dark. Ehen the stars came out we got to lay in the grass and find the north star. After that I had to feed my rabbit and get ready for bed and so did the kittens. How the kittens got ready for bed is to give themselves a bath.
When me and my cousin were finding the north star we saw two cats playing together and then we thought we saw a mom cat and a bayb cat made out of stars in the sky. It was very fun!!! The kittens names: Moe, Baby, Flattop, Baby Blue Eyes and Marco Polo.
It was A very Good DAY!!!


My soccer game

Zachary Barnhart

Me, my mom my step dad and my baby sister went to my game. We were going to play Arcata Lightning. It was fun. We got to kick off first. We kicked the ball and the game was started. Then the ball was coming really fast to my teammate. He kicked it and it went soaring through the air and scored a goal. Then the other team got to kick off. After they kicked off, we stole the ball back and then it was half time. After half time the other team got to kick off again. Then we stole the ball again and scored a goal. At the end the score was 2 to 0 and we won. After the game was over we went home and I was really tired.


The Game
Jacob Downing

A year ago my baseball team was in the championship game. We weere playing a hard team. My brouher was pitching. And I was at first base and Billy was catching. And my brother pitch and the ball was hit to me and I dropped it. I picked it up and I dove to the base. OUT! said the umpire. My dad cheerd and there was one more out and we win. My brouther threw the ball, strike one, strike two, strike three. The game was over. We won. My brother and I got a trophy and the rest of the team got trophys too.


Moonstone Beach

Ryan Comer

“Drip drip drip” I heard in the cave. It was dark. But not really dark. My mom’s friend Scott wanted me to go in a big hole at the bottom of the wall, at the end of the cave. But I didn’t because I was scared to do it. Scott scared me! We walked along the shallow water and saw a big crab at the bottom of the shallow water. Me and my brother played and charged through the sand. We had lunch, and just had a good time.


camping

Taqurri Sanderson

This weekend I went camping. My next door neighbors came with me. It was a half hour away. It was call HIDDEN SPRING. It was a great camping trip. We went swimming. And me and my mommy Jumpt off a rock at the same time. And their was fish in the water. And the water was shallow but as you went farther it got really, really deep. It was so deep then, we stade there for a hour then we went back to camp. And we ate dinner then we waited till it was dark. And we made smores.


The Cruse
by Billy Bean

Me, my mom, my dad and my sister went on a Cruse. When we flew to Florida it was night time. We spent the night at a hotel. It was fun. The next day we went to the place to get on the ship. But before we could get on the ship we had to wait. Then they called us up to get on. When we got on the ship, it was so cool. When we got to our room it was cool too. I could even fit in the window. It took a little while to get going. We got to swim with stingrays. It was really cool and fun. Then we got back on the ship. The next day we went to a different island and we got tosnorkel in the Bahamas. I went and layed on a hammock but I fell off. My mom had to save my sister. because she almost drown. The next day we fed fish. It was cool. There is one more island. Well, me and my dad got to watch the shark show. Then we got to see some turtles and we got to see some more fish. When I went to the Christian concert. After the concert some preachers would preach but I fell asleep. My mom and dad would take me and my sister back to the room. Then they would go back. But sometimes my mom would record it and we would watch the tape and when we went to diner it was cool. I liked the food. We had a cool waiter. The cruise was fun.


My trip to Italy

by Jesse Rovai

“Whoopee,” I said when my parents told my that we were going to Italy, but they told me 2 months before we went. I was wating for that two months to go by and finally that two moths to go by but we had to drive to San franisco to catch the plane to new york. but we got a hotel room the last Day we got up at 5:00 a.m. the shuttle to the airport and we had to what for hours for the plane to new york and from new york landing form new then finally got to new york but when in we had to what another 4 hour then we got on the plane to Italy eight hours to get to Italy. wene we got there it was confusing because they are 9 hours ahad but the second Day we walked a lot and all the cities were fun.


The Beach
Steven Zakrzewski

The waves were noisy. I was at the beach. We drove to the beach in the famly car. Mom and Dad said “let’s go to the beach.” Me, Aaron, and Robert were playing in the sand. Mom had to keep Robert from getitng wet in the ocean. Then it was time to go.


Santa Cruz
by Bonnie Cooke

Yahoo! I cried. I went to tell my stepbrother, stepsister, and half sister that we were going to Santa Cruz beach board walk! So we packed our bags, and got in the car and went to Santa Cruz beach board walk. It took forever! Finally we got there and got a room! After that we got our bags out of the car and in the room! On Sunday we went to the board walk for a little while. We went on a roller coaster, a ship, a log ride, a helicopter ride, a tram ride, and a spinny ride. After we had garlic fries. Then we had to go home. It was a long ride home.


Soccer Game

Zack Jones

At the start of my game everyone on my team was saying the other team was easy to beat. The game started. We kicked off and I wasn’t subbed out until the other half started. They made two goals. It was 0-2. We were losing. The other goaly kicked the ball. I head-butted it. It hurt and at the end it was 0-3. That was unusual because at the start we thought we were going to win. I didn’t think so.


A true Story
Matthew Cotton

Matthew’s Baseball Games
One day Matthew had baseball practice and at the end of practice we finally got our uniforms. I was really, really happy. The next day I got to finally do practice in my uniform I felt really, really, good! I had so much fun doing practice in my uniform it was really cool. Me and my team had to do a lot of practice. We did really good on games but I am not going to tell you about that just yet.

Matthew had a really Great time
Matthew was really great at baseball in fact he was the best player on the team really I mean it. When we had practice and the coach pitched to me the bases were loaded and I made a home run every single time. I was basically the best pitcher. And hitter on the team! I really love baseball, it is really fun. You should try to be pitcher, first baseman, and all those other things, trust me. One day at practice we were so on fire and after practice our coach gave us sado it tasted really, really, good. Some times our coach was really, really crazy in the head. It’s like cooc, cooc, cooc in the head it’s really, really, true. My other teammates were horubol all they got were balls and they walked bases! One player on my team all most got a homerun. Well I can tell you one thing he always got me on home plate if I did make the homerun. But sill we always lost. But one time we won our first game.
What I just told you that was all about my scrimmage at practice.
Well anyway I had a best friend that when I was on third base he got four balls and I got to home plate. Practice is sometimes fun and some times not fun. Most of the time it was fun and I mean really, really, fun.
One day after practice me and my friends went out for pizza.
We had Domino’s pizza they have the best pizza in the town.
The reason we went for pizza is to celebrate for a very, very good practice. My coach kept switching where we had to go for practice.


The first time I went to the Dentest
Kyle Surwillo

When I was about 4 I was going to the dentist. I was excited at first, but when I got there it was ok at first, but when it was my turn it was painful. It hurt badly. They were drilling my teeth to make my teeth silver. and wene they were done it hurt for a little bit and then we went home.


On are way to my grandma and grandpa’s house
Dwayne Cooper

My news article is about me, my brother, my mom and my dad. We all went to my grandma and grandpa’s house. My mom slid off the road. My dad was sleeping. When he woke up he thought we were in a hurricane. At eight o’clock a tow truck came. The next day we made it to my grandma and grandpa’s house. My brother and I played games with my cousin Divonty. My cousin Divonty is only three years old.


Going to redding
Chelsey Gratz

Me, my mom, and my brother went to Redding to see my grandpa. He has a pool and a toy poodle. A toy poodle is a real poodle, they can grow up to be five years old. But they are very small. Me and my brother teach her how to swim. It is fun. My grandpa also has another dog that’s name is Jenna. Every time I go to Redding me and my grandma make breakfast, dinner and desert. We always make cake. Me, my mom, and brother love going to Redding, it is so fun. Also, sometimes, if it is summer, I get to sleep outside with Marcy “the poodle” on the swing. It gets up to 90ºF at night.


Birthday Party

Taylor McMillin

“Weeha!” I went to my friend’s house. I went over there at 5’clock. She’s turning ten. She invited me, Imogene, Shawna, Jorden. We played Hide-and-Seek. I was having so much fun. I spent the night We watched goosebumps. Then her mom Ardie made us popcorn. Guess what? We had a popcorn fight. I had too much fun. I’m tired now. Good night. Haaaaaa> Then in the morning we had Waffles. Here I come! Yum, yum, yum.
I was sad when my mom picked me up from her house.


My moms know house is great!
Billy Earls

When I saw my mom’s know house I was like WOW!!! It was so cool we have a hot tub. And a jucoosy tub and and an up starse. And a deke for upstars. And an airhocky tabel. And we are going to get a trampilling. And we are going to get a pool table I Loveing the know house. COOL!!!!!!!!! But my story dusent end rite there I still have a lote more to tell you moving in was one part time to tell you the secont. It is the first nite in the know house it was fun I love moving it is great it is so fun.


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Tee’Ara Smith

A girl was digging for sandcrabs and she found won. She showed her mom and her mom said what happen. I said I fond a sandcrab. It was hot in the summer time. What! said my mom. It’s huag she siad. We did it for fun. We put it back. Next we went to a Restrant. I got sherimp and fries. My mom got crab and fries.


The duble trip to Oregon
by Jesse Komara

It was a long trip to Oregon we were going to pike up my brother. “fineily” I said we have got sum food to eat I was storving. three owers later we finily got in Oregon lebeden we were on ower way to see my beruther’s and pikup my ether beruther we got 1 of my beruther. bet my ether beruther’s wernt haum so we sade there intel they got there. wine theye got there wine theye did we were so hapey. we wint to the poerk and the next day we went swiming. we staed a litel longer thene we went home. tow day’s later we kame bake. my beruther’s were siperised that we were bake so soon. Sow stade for 2 more day’s. the last day’s we had so fen. Thene we left agen.


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Cody Chapman

His name is Jassn. and he is a four foot Python. His owner’s Name is cody. his home is a glas TrErEEM a he is spoted Dack boun he eats Mise. and He is activ


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Sam Sprague

I was jumping on the bed and i fell on the windo sill and I was bleeding on the flor. It did not hurt untill I was in the car – like 10 minis down the road. I got a lot of stichis. I felt my fase. It was wierd. now it is a skrae.





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